A Poem for Luna
I compare the moon here to a girl.
Most words that I write here would represent an idea. Take them literaly and you will find yourself lost. The last stanza...for you to understand that you should've felt what I felt...you wont know what "these emotions" are if you havn't felt them...You have to know how my mind works to understand this poem fully...a message to someone who breaths down my neck
I dont just place words here and place rhymes and a meter...this one doesn't have a meter.
Luna, Luna our moon's name
In the darkness of night she blesses us with her reign
In the dark sky she would always shine bright
Nothing in the heavens could ever match her light
Her light would guide travellers who pass by
Her light helps these traverllers once more to try
These heart broken souls were once lost in the dark night
But when Luna shows her face, they would again see light
There are times when she would show her face
There are times when she would leave no trace
Her light will not be always there for you
There will come a time when she will leave you
Never fear if the light is gone
Time is young, there would be other full moons to come
The past luna shall be replaced by a new one
So let these emotions ease and regret none
merlynthemagical
Write what you wanna write..write what you feel inside with of course no intention to impress readers...
intricate_lies (guest)
That's not a good attitude for anyone who writes anything. It's like you're putting yourself above the rest, being condescending.
In my opinion, you don't need the introductory paragraph. The poem is actually pretty concrete, and despite what you said "Take them literaly and you will find yourself lost", this poem works in both the literal and metaphorical levels.
I like this way, way better than your other ones.
jess008
intricate_lies (guest)
jess008
